RE: The fathers of old never left; (Inkwell prompt)

This is a fascinating story of the passing of family duty throughout the ages. You have done well at telling this tale in action, however it would have been wonderful to see the conversations between your characters flow more smoothly. We recommend reading our article How to Write Dialogue in Fiction for tips on structure.

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